January 23, 2013

Pitch Wars Entry #4 - THE RIGHT EXPOSURE (YA Contemporary)

NAME: Ghenet Myrthil
MENTOR: Dahlia Adler
TITLE: The Right Exposure
GENRE: YA Contemporary
WORD COUNT: 59,000

PITCH:

To become a professional photographer, earn her parents' approval, and impress her crush, sixteen-year-old Kayla must win a scholarship at a once-in-a-lifetime photography workshop in Hawaii. There’s just one problem—her debilitating fear of heights. If she can’t overcome her phobia before the flight, she can kiss her dreams goodbye. 

FIRST 250:

When I finally spot James upstairs at his house party, my insides flutter, but not for the obvious reason. Sure, a few butterflies appear because I’m staring at the guy I have a major crush on. But mostly, it’s like vicious bats are beating their wings against my ribcage, because of the deck James stands on.

A deck I’ll have to cross in order to reach him.

One, like all decks this high off the ground, I’m convinced will collapse any minute.

 “Jackpot,” Corinne says. Unfazed by the deck’s existence, she walks to the set of open French doors that lead to it. “Now we’ve found the real party. C’mon, Kayla. The girls are here.”

Through the floor-to-ceiling windows, I watch James lean against the railing, surrounded by people from school. He hasn’t even lived here that long and already he has a ton of friends. It’s the middle of winter, so everyone is wearing coats, scarves, hats. James is talking about something, his hands animating his words. Then he reaches into his pocket and removes a tube of Chapstick. He applies it and rubs his lips together.

Oh, my god. 

I have to force myself to stop gawking at him and turn my attention back to Corinne. She’s already outside chatting with Lisa and Rachel. They’re really Corinne’s friends but we all hang out together sometimes. Lucky for me, they’re right next to the French doors so I can keep my feet planted in the house—where it’s safe.

1 comments:

Anonymous said...

I'd love to take a look at the manuscript! Please send it as a word attachment to andrea@harveyklinger.com, and put Pitch Wars in the subject. Thanks! - Andrea Somberg, Harvey Klinger Inc.

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