January 23, 2013

Pitch Wars Entry #32 - DARK MOON (YA Historical Fantasy)

NAME: Crystal Collier
MENTOR: Sharon Johnston
TITLE: DARK MOON
GENRE: YA Historical Fantasy
WORD COUNT: 92,000 

PITCH:

Alexia’s nightmares become reality: a dead baron, red-eyed wraiths, and forbidden love with a man hunted by these creatures. After an attack close to home, Alexia realizes she cannot keep one foot in her old life and one in this new world. DARK MOON is Jane Eyre meets Supernatural.
 

FIRST 250:

Alexia was reasonably confident exiting the carriage was the equivalent of stepping into Hell. She glanced out again at the grand roman pillars of the finest country estate in Devonshire and shivered. Just let me be invisible.

Mother cleared her throat. Her golden tresses glowed in the lamplight leaking through the open door. Alexia straightened up. Her mouth curled into a forced smile as she smoothed the folds of her amber gown, the newest cut and height of fashion for 1768.

Mother rolled her eyes, took Father’s waiting hand, and descended to the drive.

Alexia scowled. A month ago she had turned sixteen. A month ago the expectation to be lady-like and presentable had begun. A month ago the nightmares had started. Her night terrors certainly resulted from Father’s talk of making her a match early—before anyone glimpsed the ghastly girl and advise the gentleman against it. Her too-thin frame and sunken jowls were enough to keep her eyes away from reflective surfaces. How could she fault others for sharing that opinion?

Father extended a hand. “Alexia, come.”

She’d inherited his dark tresses, but that’s where her resemblance to this handsome man ended. He gave her a grim smile and assisted her down. Her parents pulled together, draping her in their shadow—though out of embarrassment or a need to shelter her, she couldn’t decide.

She glanced back over her shoulder as the carriage rattled away.

Goodbye safety. Goodbye anonymity. She turned to the brightened steps. Hello, Hell.

7 comments:

Jordy said...

I would love to see the full manuscript. Could you please send it to me at jordy@thebookeralbertagency.com? Please put #PitchWars in the subject. Thanks!

Jessica Sinsheimer said...

I'd be happy to see the full manuscript. Please put the query in the body of the email, with synopsis and full manuscript attached as Word documents, to ESubmissions@SarahJaneFreymann.com. Please put #PitchWars in subject line. Thank you! :)

Suzie Townsend said...

Wow, Crystal, this fabulous--I'd love to see more! Please email the full manuscript as a word document with your query pasted into the first page to suzie@newleafliterary.com. Put REQUESTED MATERIAL in the subject line.

Louise Fury said...

Would love to read the full. Please send it to me in a word doc with the pitch/query letter in the body of the email AND as page 1 of the manuscript. Email: louise@lperkinsagency.com
Thanks!

Natalie M. Lakosil said...

You had me at YA Historical. And then I fainted when I saw Supernatural. Please send me the full with pitch in manuscript and email to natalie@bradfordlit.com!!

Victoria Marini said...

This is remarkable! Can you please email the full manuscript either as a word document or .PDF to Victoria@gelfmanschneider.com. Thanks!

Rachel Ekstrom said...

Hi Crystal, I'd love to read this! Please send the full mss to rachel.queries {at} irenegoodman.com and please put "REQUESTED-PITCH WARS" in the subject line.

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