January 23, 2013

Pitch Wars Entry #28 - BETWEEN THE CLOUDS AND THE MOON (YA Steampunk)

NAME: Chelsea Bobulski
MENTOR: Sarah Nicolas
TITLE: BETWEEN THE CLOUDS AND THE MOON
GENRE: YA Steampunk
WORD COUNT: 92,000

PITCH: Meg's black-market tinkering has landed her little brother in a deadly prison. To rescue him, she must hitch a ride on a pirate airship -- captained by the boy who broke her heart -- to search for an ancient Mayan treasure. Instead, she finds the ghost of her inventor father's legacy deep in the jungles of Mexico.

FIRST 250:

My job was dangerous in its simplicity.

I should have remembered that, considering I’d worked at the Harrison & Sons’ Diving and Processing Plant for three years now, screwing lids onto vials filled with phosphorus sea slugs and the gelatinous solvent that preserved their light. Really, it should have been at the forefront of my mind.

Every day, for twelve hours straight, it was the same. The swooshing of the rubber belt beneath the vials, pushing them down the line; the soft sighs of the women around me as they twisted caps onto the various tubes, sweat dotting their kerchiefs; the clucking of their tongues as they sorted the vials based on size and grade—military, industrial, or commercial—around their workstations.

It was easy to forget the danger when the process became repetitive to the point of terminal boredom. I’d watched over a dozen girls leave the plant permanently disfigured after forgetting themselves, daydreaming about God knew what. They were clumsy with their thoughts and with their hands, and the solvent poured down their arms, seeped into their shirts and down their leather work gloves. The burns could be treated, but not fast enough to stop their hands from shriveling, their muscles from deteriorating.

Most women didn't last very long in this factory, but the work did not bother me. The monotony of it all was usually a welcome reprieve from my life outside these walls.

9 comments:

Drea said...

Hello Ms. Bobulski,

You had me at the pitch. I am keen to read more of your manuscript. I am an agent at The Rights Factory, based in Toronto ON.

Please contact me at drea@therightsfactory.com

Jessica Sinsheimer said...

I'd be happy to see the full manuscript. Please put the query in the body of the email, with synopsis and full manuscript attached as Word documents, to ESubmissions@SarahJaneFreymann.com. Please put #PitchWars in subject line. Thank you! :)

Suzie Townsend said...

Wow, Chelsea, this fabulous--I'd love to see more! Please email the full manuscript as a word document with your query pasted into the first page to suzie@newleafliterary.com. Put REQUESTED MATERIAL in the subject line.

Louise Fury said...

Hi Chelsea! Would love to read the full. Please send it in a word doc with the pitch/query letter in the body of the email AND as page 1 of the manuscript. Email: louise@lperkinsagency.com
Thanks!

Jordy said...

I would love to see the full manuscript. Could you please send it to me at jordy@thebookeralbertagency.com? Please put Pitch Wars in the subject. Thanks!

Anonymous said...

I'd love to take a look at the manuscript! Please send it as a word attachment to andrea@harveyklinger.com, and put Pitch Wars in the subject. Thanks! - Andrea Somberg, Harvey Klinger Inc.

Anonymous said...

I'd love to take a look at the manuscript! Please send it as a word attachment to andrea@harveyklinger.com, and put Pitch Wars in the subject. Thanks! - Andrea Somberg, Harvey Klinger Inc.

Victoria Marini said...

Hi Chelsea, I love this! Can you please send me the full as a .PDF or word document. I can be reached at Victoria@gelfmanschneider.com Thanks!

Janet B Taylor said...

Chelsea- your book really looks amazing!! You had me at space pirates. :)

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